Through Eyes Unseen
Blinded they only see what they are told.
Never knowing the truth they are allowed to grow unchecked and to bold.
Freedoms taken once absolute;
With pride we held true grasping as they slip from what we no longer hold.
They cry with tears of sorrow and pain.
Oh how blind have we grown, now so vain.
The masses follow lies generated by the few.
With glutinous blindness false truths they see what a glowing box says is true.
They cry with tears of sorrow and pain.
Mother of Liberty, Father of Freedom allow your children too dry your tears.
Mother shine your light, opening eyes that refuse to see.
Father teach them of our true freedoms, removing their blind fears.
You have shielded us now we shall shield you in your time of need; our voices will ring out we are free.
With voices of free people will deafen the lies of corrupt leaders, media slaves.
They wish to lay us in our shallow graves.
We the awakened with waver, we will not let freedom and liberty fall.
Regaining their strength, like giants they will stand tall.
Our country we love our government we can never trust.
With reports of false threats you demand for our freedoms and liberties we must.
NO we will shout; you will no longer control us by a private false currency.
NO we will shout; no longer will we stand for the terror you create.
No we will shout; no longer will listen to your messages of blind hate.
They cry with tears of sorrow and pain.
Let them live in the prisons they built.
Exposing their tyranny and shame,
Let them eat and drink the same poisons they feed to us.
Strip their wealth and rob their fame;
Let them see how it feels to be oppressed.
Now bound by the chains they tried to use to enslave us.
They cry with tears of sorrow and pain.
"We the people" will restore freedom and liberty and become once again
A beacon for all the worlds corrupt to see.
The imagery of the people's suffering,
And the strength of standing up for justice.
Well done on this poem.
You handled the topic with great care.
"and to bold" or "and too bold"
I liked it. Good anti establishment verses. It sounds like true patriotism. Like the REAL Uncle Sam
calling Bull-spit on what America has become. The PR representatives , public communications and mass media trying to
bank on fragmented ideals that go nowhere , making good intentions and real standpoints into cash-cow trends
and said things allow trash like reality TV to thrive, and any antagonist with nothing but complaints to brainwash the youth
into hating with out reason, complaining with out offering any real solutions and seeking a negative solution to what a compromise
can easily fix.
now the critique and I hope you plz dont feel mad at me for it. : it would be an insult to you if I just said whatever and
not asked cuz some stuff confused me in the way you wrote it. Maybe its cuz I am not used to reading poetry.
please explain "We the awakened with waver" the structure I mean
"Our country we love our government we can never trust."
I think the DA system for text changes the structure :/
did you mean?
"Our country we love,
our government we can never trust."
"Now bound by the chains they tried too use to enslave us." third line before last in last stanza
the structure of "too uses to" I don't understand.
is it like saying "Now they too are bound by the chains which they used to enslave us"?
please hide this comment after you read it cuz I feel it is annoying to have it here,
if not you can ignore it and hide it all the same. I write it cuz you asked critique.
Unfortunatly my grammar sucks so I am not sure which "to" to use here. It is meant to show the corrupt have been left unchecked for far to long.
"We the awakened with waver"
Oops major typo it should say "We the awakened without waver"
Meaning as the few stand to protect freedom and liberty will never give into their corruption we will not waver in our fight never give up we will go on until the end and we will win in the end.
"Our country we love,
our government we can never trust."
"Now bound by the chains they tried too use to enslave us." third line before last in last stanza
the structure of "too uses to" I don't understand.
is it like saying "Now they too are bound by the chains which they used to enslave us"?
I like this question
"Our country we love, our government we can never trust."
This is some thing personal to me I love my country in the same way I love my family and Vicki. My government can go to HELL 90% of America's elected officials including Barry Saronto A.K.A. Obama our illegal president are puppets for the "elite". They have gone away from the ideals that made America the beacon for freedom and prosperity of the world.
They have turned their backs on liberty and constitutional freedoms.
"Now bound by the chains they tried too use to enslave us."
You are right in your interpretation of the line.
the senate's agendas and the pay off individuals that finance their campaigns.
thanks for clarifying the lines. My main confusion was the structuring
because it threw the flow of what you were saying off and my mind felt it had to stop to
figure out what the sentence was saying. I getthe meaning but it was the way it was structured
but I am sure that is an easy fix and the message isnt drowned out all the same
check this out though
In Puerto Rico a senator nicked "EL Chuchin" went aroudn paying 6k to a bimbo skin slut
to access him on how to dress, and had a party with several of these women during teh Bday of
a family member. next appears out of the blue with a Bentley. quite expensive. The guy joked it was a gift
and kept on lying about it because he is not allowed to accept gifts... this crap goes on all the time
everywehere like the recession bit. I dont buy how its being handled i cant help but feel that
invisible hands are screwing us all over.
pff My country is an ally and a colony of the US and yet we arent allowed to vote... hence
Obamamessiah douchebag was gonna be here for 2 hours
2 friggin hours!!!!!!!! thats tax money missspent on a trip he has little time for...